Wednesday 12 December 2012

fourth draft of script

FADE IN:

EXT.  IN THE KITCHEN – DAY

LISA, 35 average looking with brown hair, is cooking lunch in the kitchen and BEN, 15 blonde hair, is sat round the table. Ben and CHLOE 13 blonde, quite short, have just had a heated argument in the dining room over Ben getting a letter from his mum. Ben had thrown the letter away without reading it and Chloe didn’t agree. Lisa can see Ben is upset about what has just happened but it thinking whether to get involved or not.

BEN:
(talking quietly to himself)
Why is Chloe even bothered,
it has nothing to do with her?

LISA:
(trying to lighten the mood)
 I’m making a roast for dinner,
peas or carrots?

Ben:
Carrots, oh whichever it
doesn’t matter

Lisa:
Don’t be so rude, it’s not my
Fault you and Chloe have
fell out.

There is an awkward silent (6 seconds) between Lisa and Ben.

Lisa:
You should really make it up to
 Chloe, she is having a tough time
and you were pretty hard on her.

Ben:
I know but I don’t know
what to say to her.

Lisa:
She is in the games room now
and she is feeling quite bad. Just go
up to her and try to change the
Conversation, you too are close and
it’s a shame to break that over a
silly argument.


Ben:
I know, I’ll go and sort
 it out now.

Ben stands up and walks towards the door.

Ben:
Lisa

Lisa:
Yeah

Ben:
Thanks

Lisa smiles then turns the radio up as Ben walks out of the room.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE GAMES ROOM – DAY

Chloe is sat on the sofa in the games room on her mobile, when ben walks in. Chloe’s eyes are all red from where she has been crying.
CHLOE:
Hi
She wipes away her tears
Ben:
Oh Chloe hi…

Ben walks over to the sofa were Chloe is sitting and sits next to her. There is still tension between them and there is an awkward silence.
Ben:
I’m sorry for upsetting
 you before.

Chloe:
I’m sorry for making such a fuss
over a silly letter, it was
your letter and I should have
 never said anything.

Ben:
I know you’re only trying to look
out for me but you have to
understand you don’t know my
mum and what she is like.

Chloe:
I know it’s just your lucky
          (more)
Enough to know your mum and
I don’t want to throw it all
 away just because of
what happened in the past.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT. Flashback - 2 years ago – Kitchen – Morning

It is Chloe’s birthday and all the members of the foster family are sat around the table. Chloe is looking through her birthday mail.
Ben:
(joking)
Come on Chloe just open
Them

Chloe:
I was just looking if I
could see one from my mum

Ben:
Well open them and find out
Chloe starts to open her birthday
mail but realises that there isn’t
 one from her mum.

Chloe:
(signs)
Well I guest she has forgot
Again

MEGAN:
It might just be late or
she might bring it round herself.
Few seconds of silent and
everyone can see Chloe is upset.

LAURA:
Here open might and Megan
present, it will cheer up.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN LAURA’S BEDROOM – DAY

Laura, 10, short, ginger hair and Megan, 12, brown hair, are sat on Laura’s bed discussing Laura’s future. She is going to move in with new foster parents at the end of the week. She has all her stuff packed up in cardboard boxes.


Laura:
We can still stay friends
and Julie says you can come
and stay over whenever you want.

Megan:
I know but it won’t be the same.

Laura:
Change is good and we
can still talk at school.

Megan:
I know but who will cheer me
 up when I’m upset and make
 me laugh when I’m fed up.

Laura:
You have other friends,
 Lucy seems quite nice,

Megan:
You don’t even know Lucy
you have only just arrived
in here, I’ve been here for
 years and you have been
 the only person to talk to me.

Laura:
Just give her a chance you
 never know she might be really
nice.
Megan:
But how do I know I can trust
 her, you’re the only person
 who knows my secrets,
 what if she tells someone?

Laura:
Well you don’t need to tell
her about your past and what
 your parents did to you.

Megan:
But what if she asks about them

Laura:
She won’t and it smells like
 Lisa is making the roast,
shall we go and see
 if she needs any help?
Laura:
Yeah but that won’t solve
 my problems

Megan and Laura both decide to walk downstairs to the kitchen to help Lisa.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE GAMES ROOM – DAY

Ben and Chloe both look up and smile at each other, Ben sees that Chloe has been crying so he decides to offer her a game of pool, to take her mind of things.

Ben:
Do you want a game of pool
so I can beat you again?

Chloe:
I let you win

Ben:
You’re only saying that
because you’ll a bad loser.

They both laugh, Ben stands up and picks up both cues and hands one to Chloe. Chloe takes the cue and also stands up leaving her mobile on the sofa.

Chloe:
(still shaking from the argument)
I’ll set the game up if I can break?

Ben:
Fine, I’ll win away

Chloe’s reaches the triangle and all the red and yellow balls from under the table. She then places them neatly on the table on lines the Black ball up. Ben laughs because she is taking too long.

Ben:
It doesn’t have to be
perfect you know?

Chloe:
I know but I don’t want
any excuses when I beat you.
Do you have the chalk?


Ben:
Yeah
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE CORRIDOR – DAY

On the way to the kitchen they hear Ben and Chloe talking in the games room.
Laura:
Mmm sounds like Ben
 and Laura are fighting again

Megan:
I wonder what about this time

Laura:
Shall we have a quick listen?

Megan:
Well it’s none of our
business but I guess it won’t
hurt.

Laura and Megan both lean again the games room door to try and listen in.
Megan:
There only playing pool,
So let’s go downstairs.

Laura:
Okay I need a drink anyway.

Megan:
Race ya?

Megan and Laura both race down the corridor into the kitchen.

DISSOLVE TO:

EXT. IN THE KITCHEN - DAY
Lisa:
Will you two stop being so
 silly and calm down, I’m trying
 to finish dinner.

Megan:
Sorry Lisa, it was my
idea to race.



Laura:
Yeah Lisa it was all
 Megan’s fault.

Megan and Laura turn to look at each other and smile sarcastically.
Lisa:
I don’t care who’s fault
it is, I have a million
other things to do so will
you two either help or go
 and mess about somewhere else.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE GAMES ROOM - DAY

Ben hands the chalk over to Chloe and checks his phone.

Chloe:
You ready?

Ben:
I’ve been ready
for ages

Chloe breaks but she doesn’t get any balls in so she rolls her eyes at Ben. Ben smiles and takes his go; he easily gets a yellow ball into the top right pocket, he takes his go again and gets another one in the same pocket.

Ben:
Looks like your red then
 and are you sure not going
to lose?

Chloe:
I wanted to be red anyway.

Chloe takes her go and also gets a red in this time in the bottom right pocket. She smiles sarcastically at Ben and takes her go again this time she misses.

Chloe:
YES!

Ben’s phones beeps, he looks at it but chooses to ignore it. He takes his go, this time quickly and he uses too much force so he misses.
Chloe:
Who was it?

Ben:
What do you mean?

Ben pretends not to understand because he doesn’t want to tell Chloe the truth. Ben is not in the mood and he tries not to answer.
Chloe:
(raising her voice)
You know what I mean, who
rang you?

Chloe realises he isn’t going to answer so she leans over the table and lines her next shot up, Ben throws his cue onto the table and wrecks the game. Chloe then stands up and looks at Ben, hand on her hip
Chloe:
Ben just because I was going
 to win and you still haven’t
 answered my question.

Ben:
Actually you lined that shot
 up totally wrong and I couldn’t’
t be bothered playing anymore.
It’s none of your business who
rings me and whether I answer or
not.

Ben goes to walk out of the room when Chloe interrupts his movement.
Chloe:
So you’ll just go to walk
away as normal, I’m meant
to be your best friend and
best friends don’t keep secrets.

Ben turns around and looks at Chloe

Ben:
Fine, it was my mum ringing
but I didn’t want you to get
upset again.

Chloe:
I wasn’t upset!

Ben:
Chloe I’m not stupid and why
are we arguing about this again?


Chloe:
You started all this, and why
don’t you just listen to your
mum for a change. She might
 actually have something
important to say and then
 you would have
wished you had listened.

Ben interrupts her
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE KITCHEN - DAY

Lisa:
(starting to get frustrated)
Are Ben and Chloe Fighting
Again?
             
Laura:
Last time we heard they
were playing pool.

Megan:
But it’s not like we were
trying to listen or anything

Laura nudges Megan as to say stop

Laura:
(trying to cover up)
Why don’t you go and check while
 I and Megan watch the food.

Lisa:
Well I’m not sure, I don’t want
 you burning yourselves.

Megan:
We won’t, we have cooked
 loads of times

Laura looks at Megan again as if to say stop making it worse

Lisa:
You shouldn’t be telling me
that, and I think I will go
 and check on them. Don’t
hurt yourselves or burn
the roast and I will be back soon.
Lisa exits the kitchen and starts walking to the games room, while the girls sit room the table.

Laura:
So I wonder what Lisa will
 say

Megan:
Dunno but she is in a really
 bad mood so it’s not going
to be good.

Laura:
It’s very quiet this
morning, where is
everybody?

Megan:
They found out that Lisa
was in a bad mood and decided
 to stay in their rooms.

Laura:
I don’t like it being this
 quite, shall we have a look
 at Lucy’s magazines.

Megan:
She wouldn’t be too
happy if she found out.

Laura:
But she is upstairs so she will
 never know if we put them back
 afterwards.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT. IN THE GAMES ROOM - DAY

Ben:
My mum has never said anything
 worth hearing and if you’re so
 bothered why don’t you talk to
 her.
Ben offers his phone to Chloe but doesn’t take it.

Chloe:
Why would I want to talk
 to your mum?


Ben:
I dunno but you seem
to know everything, so I just
 through you would know what to say

Chloe:
That’s not fair I’m only
trying to stop you making
 the biggest mistake of your life.

Lisa the care worker walks in from the kitchen.

Lisa:
Not this again! I
through you two had
made friends?

Ben:
It’s Chloe’s fault, thinking
 she knows everything

Lisa:
I don’t care whose fault it
 is, I have worked hard all
 day cleaning up and making
 lunch, I haven’t got time
for this. Both of you go to
 your rooms and I don’t
 want you to hear another
word from either of you.
Dinner will be ready in 10
minutes.

Ben and Chloe both walk out of the games room in a mood without talking and Lisa follows behind to back to the kitchen.
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT.  IN THE KITCHEN – DAY

Megan and Laura have got themselves a drink and they are still sat at the table.
Megan:
Quick Lisa is
coming, stir the food.
Laura gets up from the table
 and goes to stir the food.




Laura:
(turns to face her)

Quick put the magazines away
and the food is all stuck to
the pan
Megan:
Just stir it around a bit
and it will be fine with some
gravy.
Laura:
Did you not hear me put
the magazines away?

Megan:
I’m doing it now.

Megan puts the magazines away just in time and goes to wash the empty cups out.

Third Scrip

Third draft of my 10 minute scrip
Storyline 1 – In the Kitchen
Lisa is cooking lunch in the kitchen and Ben is sat round the table. Ben and Chloe have just had a heated argument in the dining room over Ben getting a letter from his mum. Ben had thrown the letter away without reading it and Chloe didn’t agree. Lisa can see Ben is upset about what has just happened but it thinking whether to get involved or not.
Ben: (talking quietly to himself)
Why is Chloe even bothered, it has nothing to do with her?
Lisa: (trying to lighten the mood)
I’m making a roast for dinner, peas or carrots?
Ben:
Carrots, oh whichever it doesn’t matter
Lisa:
Don’t be so rude, its not my fault you and Chloe have fell out.
There is an awkward silent (6 seconds) between Lisa and Ben.
Lisa:
You should really make it up to Chloe, she is having a tough time and you were pretty hard on her.
Ben:
I know but I don’t know what to say to her.
Lisa:
She is in the games room now and she is feeling quite bad. Just go up to her and try to change the conversation, you too are close and it’s a shame to break that over a silly argument.
Ben:
I know, I’ll go and sort it out now.
Ben stands up and walks towards the door.
Ben:
Lisa
Lisa:
Yeah
Ben:
Thanks
Lisa smiles then turns the radio up as Ben walks out of the room.
Storyline 2 – In the games room
Chloe is sat on the sofa in the games room on her mobile, when ben walks in. Chloe’s eyes are all red from where she has been crying.
Chloe:
Hi
She wipes away her tears
Ben:
Oh Chloe hi…
Ben walks over to the sofa were Chloe is sitting and sits next to her. There is still tension between them and there is an awkward silence. 
Ben:
 I’m sorry for upsetting you before.
Chloe:
I’m sorry for making such a fuss over a silly letter, it was your letter and I should have never said anything.
Ben:
 I know you’re only trying to look out for me but you have to understand you don’t know my mum and what she is like.
Chloe
I know it’s just your lucky enough to know your mum and I don’t want to throw it all away just because of what happened in the past.
Flashback – in the kitchen 2 years ago
It is Chloe’s birthday and everyone is sat around the table. Chloe is looking through her birthday mail.
Ben (joking):
Come on Chloe just open them
Chloe:
I was just looking if I could see one from my mum
Ben:
Well open them and find out
Chloe starts to open her birthday mail but realises that there isn’t one from her mum.
Chloe: (signs)
Well I guest she has forgot again
Megan:
It might just be late or she might bring it round herself.
Few seconds of silent and everyone can see Chloe is upset.
Laura:
Here open might and Megan present, it will cheer up.

Storyline 3- In Laura’s bedroom
Laura and Megan are sat on Laura’s bed discussing Laura’s future. She is going to move in with new foster parents at the end of the week. She has all her stuff packed up in cardboard boxes.
Laura:
We can still stay friends and Julie says you can come and stay over whenever you want.
Megan:
I know but it won’t be the same.
Laura:
Change is good and we can still talk at school.
Megan:
I know but who will cheer me up when I’m upset and make me laugh when I’m fed up.
Laura:
You have other friends, Lucy seems quite nice,
Megan:
You don’t even know Lucy you have only just arrived in here, I’ve been here for years and you have been the only person to talk to me.
Laura:
Just give her a chance you never know she might be really nice.
Megan:
But how do I know I can trust her, you’re the only person who knows my secrets, what if she tells someone?
Laura:
. Well you don’t need to tell her about your past and what your parents did to you
Megan:
But what if she asks about them
Laura:
She won’t and it smells like Lisa is making the roast, shall we go and see if she needs any help?
Laura:
Yeah but that won’t solve my problems
Megan and Laura both decide to walk downstairs to the kitchen to help Lisa.

Storyline 2 – In the games room
There both look up and smile at each other, Ben sees that Chloe has been crying so he decides to offer her a game of pool, to take her mind of things.
Ben:
Do you want a game of pool so I can beat you again?
Chloe:
I let you win
Ben:
You’re only saying that because you’ll a bad loser.
They both laugh, Ben stands up and picks up both cues and hands one to Chloe. Chloe takes the cue and also stands up leaving her mobile on the sofa.
Chloe: (still shaking from the argument)
I’ll set the game up if I can break?
Ben:
 Fine, I’ll win away
Chloe’s reaches the triangle and all the red and yellow balls from under the table. She then places them neatly on the table on lines the Black ball up. Ben laughs because she is taking too long.

Ben:
It doesn’t have to be perfect you know?
Chloe:
 I know but I don’t want any excuses when I beat you.
Chloe:
 Do you have the chalk?
Ben:
 Yeah
Storyline 3- In the corridor
On the way they hear Ben and Chloe talking in the games room.
Laura:
Mmm sounds like Ben and Laura are fighting again
Megan:
I wonder what about this time
Laura:
Shall we have a quick listen?
Megan:
Well it’s none of our business but I guess it won’t hurt.
Laura and Megan both lean again the games room door to try and listen in.
Megan:
There only playing pool, so let’s go downstairs.
Laura:
Okay I need a drink anyway.
Megan:
Race ya?
Megan and Laura both race down the corridor into the kitchen.
Storyline 1 – in the Kitchen
Lisa:
Will you two stop being so silly and calm down, I’m trying to finish dinner.
Megan:
Sorry Lisa, it was my idea to race.
Laura:
Yeah Lisa it was all Megan’s fault.
Both turn to look at each other and smile sarcastically.
Lisa:
I don’t care who’s fault it is, I have a million other things to do so will you two either help or go and mess about somewhere else.
Storyline 2 – In the games room

He hands the chalk over and checks his phone.
Chloe:
You ready?
Ben:
I’ve been ready for ages
Chloe breaks but she doesn’t get any balls in so she rolls her eyes at Ben. Ben smiles and takes his go; he easily gets a yellow ball into the top right pocket, he takes his go again and gets another one in the same pocket.
Ben:
Looks like your red then and are you sure not going to lose?
Chloe:
I wanted to be red anyway.
Chloe takes her go and also gets a red in this time in the bottom right pocket. She smiles sarcastically at Ben and takes her go again this time she misses.
Chloe:
 YES!
 Ben’s phones beeps, he looks at it but chooses to ignore it. He takes his go, this time quickly and he uses too much force so he misses.
Chloe:
 Who was it?
Ben:
 What do you mean?
Ben pretends not to understand because he doesn’t want to tell Chloe the truth. Ben is not in the mood and he tries not to answer.
Chloe: (raising her voice)
You know what I mean, who rang you?
Chloe realises he isn’t going to answer so she leans over the table and lines her next shot up, Ben throws his cue onto the table and wrecks the game. Chloe then stands up and looks at Ben, hand on her hip
Chloe:
 Ben just because I was going to win and you still haven’t answered my question.
Ben:
Actually you lined that shot up totally wrong and I couldn’t be bothered playing anymore. It’s none of your business who rings me and whether I answer or not.
Ben goes to walk out of the room when Chloe interrupts his movement.
Chloe:
So you’ll just go to walk away as normal, I’m meant to be your best friend and best friends don’t keep secrets.
Ben turns around and looks at Chloe
Ben:
 Fine, it was my mum ringing but I didn’t want you to get upset again.
Chloe:
I wasn’t upset!
Ben:
 Chloe I’m not stupid and why are we arguing about this again?
Chloe:
You started all this, and why don’t you just listen to your mum for a change. She might actually have something important to say and then you would have wished you had listened.
Ben interrupts her
Storyline 1 – in the Kitchen

Lisa: (starting to get frustrated)
Are Ben and Chloe fighting again?
Laura:
Last time we heard they were playing pool.
Megan:
But it’s not like we were trying to listen or anything
Laura nudges Megan as to say stop
Laura: (trying to cover up)
Why don’t you go and check while I and Megan watch the food.
Lisa:
Well I’m not sure, I don’t want you burning yourselves.
Megan:
We won’t, we have cooked loads of times
Laura looks at Megan again as if to say stop making it worse
Lisa:
You shouldn’t be telling me that, and I think I will go and check on them. Don’t hurt yourselves or burn the roast and I will be back soon.
Lisa exits the kitchen and starts walking to the games room, while the girls sit room the table.
Laura:
So I wonder what Lisa will say
Megan:
Dunno but she is in a really bad mood so it’s not going to be good.
Laura:
It’s very quiet this morning, where is everybody?
Megan:
They found out that Lisa was in a bad mood and decided to stay in their rooms.
Laura:
I don’t like it being this quite, shall we have a lot at Lucy’s magazines.
Megan:
She wouldn’t be too happy if she found out.
Laura:
But she is upstairs so she will never know if we put them back afterwards.
Storyline 2 – In the games room
Ben:
My mum has never said anything worth hearing and if you’re so bothered why don’t you talk to her.
Ben offers his phone to Chloe but doesn’t take it.
Chloe:
Why would I want to talk to your mum?
Ben:
I dunno but you seem to know everything, so I just through you would know what to say
Chloe:
That’s not fair I’m only trying to stop you making the biggest mistake of your life.
Lisa the care worker walks in from the kitchen.  
Lisa:
Not this again! I through you two had made friends?
Ben:
 It’s Chloe’s fault, thinking she knows everything
Lisa:
 I don’t care whose fault it is, I have worked hard all day cleaning up and making lunch, I haven’t got time for this. Both of you go to your rooms and I don’t want you to hear another word from either of you. Dinner will be ready in 10 minutes.
Ben and Chloe both walk out of the games room in a mood without talking and Lisa follows behind to back to the kitchen.
Storyline 1 – in the Kitchen
The girls have got themselves a drink and they are still sat at the table.
Megan:
Quick Lisa is coming, stir the food.
Laura gets up from the table and goes to stir the food.
Laura: (turns to face her)
Quick put the magazines away and the food is all stuck to the pan
Megan:
Just stir it around a bit and it will be fine with some gravy.
Laura:
Did you not hear me put the magazines away?
Megan:
I’m doing it now.
Megan puts the magazines away just in time and goes to wash the empty cups out.